Thriller - Rough Cut

Above is the first rough-cut of my thriller opening 'Scarlett'.
Improvements to be made

• The entire piece needs to be edited in black and white as it appears much more stylistic and helps to create a vintafe 1930's atmosphere. 
• The sound effect of the jewelry box slamming is slightly out of sync with the shot, therefore that needs to be edited to a second earlier as it is quite obvious it's out of time. 
• There are a couple of incidents where the jewelry box sound effects jolts and the audience are able to hear where the clips of the sound effects over lap, this needs to be edited by a fade or perhaps cutting the sound clips more appropriately. 
• The beginning titles need to be adapted time-wise so they are on-screen for equal amounts of time because in this cut it varies slighty.

Pleased with

• The beginning sequence in the dressing room - flows reasonably well. 
• The titles appear to work quite well, and they are very simplistic therefore do not look tacky or ruin the vintage eeriness. 
• The shot where Scarlett glances over her shoulder - enigmatic, vaguely resembles the shot of Harry looking over his shoulder in 'The Third Man' 
• Symbolism of the lioness - the Femme Fatale running into the night under a big powerful lioness, symbolises her strength of character and her danger yet the paw upwards as if pleading for help is almost a hint to the audience that she may be in desperate need of help.
• Shadow along the step - creates tension and looks very Film Noir. 
• The shot of the picturesque alleyway with the two lamposts - inspired by the scene in The Third Man when the lead character is waiting under the lampost surrounded by the darkness.